Wednesday, September 15, 2010

Grunt-Grunt the pig

I woke up on a comfy seat in Aiden's truck. Beside me there was a bowl of warm milk and beside the warm milk there was a crushed biscuit in another bowl. I loved my warm milk and my crushed biscuit that Aiden gave me. I heard Aiden’s truck stop. Aiden hopped out of his truck. Aiden left his truck door open. An hour later I hopped out. Then BANG!! I heard a gunshot. I thought it was Aiden looking for a bird to shoot. But it wasn’t it was a hunter looking for little pigs just like me. I found Aiden and lay down beside his legs. Aiden heard the gunshot as well. He picked me up and took me to his truck. He said “do not hop out of my truck ok”.

“Oink Oink” I replied. When me and Aiden got to his house. I ran straight inside and sat by the warm fire. The fire was as warm as a boiling hot jug. When Aiden washed all the sticky blood off me. Aiden had tea. Then we went to bed. I fell straight asleep.

13 comments:

  1. Cool story sam. Katlin

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  2. I really like your Grunt-Grunt story because you have used lots of speach thats why I like your writing.

    BY AMY :)

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  3. Wow Sam B, you have written a really interesting story. I like it because you have some scary action in it and I can really see in my head, the story pictures you are painting with words when you write. I like how your story went from Grunt-Grunt being safe, to him being in danger and then ended with him being safe again.

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  4. sam your story is so cool because you used lots of verbs and ajictives



    by ashleigh

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  5. Next time dascribe the people
    by jack

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  6. Thanks libby. I kind of continued the story of your one that you wrote. All I did to make it interesting was thinking at home and writing it up on a peice of paper.

    Sam B

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  7. Also libby I used my imagination too.


    Sam B

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  8. Also I did not know what point of veiw i should write it in.Aidens point of veiw or Grunt-Grunts.In the end I chose Grunt-Grunt. I reckon I chose a great choice.


    Sam B

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  9. Hi Sam B, I like the way that you wrote from Grunt Grunt's point of view. I think your use of imagination is great, and good on you for writing down your ideas on a piece of paper when you were at home.

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  10. Thanks I will write another one but from Aidens point of view.



    Sam B

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  11. If you want me to i will write another one if you really like this one.


    Sam B

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  12. Dear Libby code you writ another one please

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  13. Dear libby could you please write another chapter.
    Sam B

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